Topic:
In some countries, women now are able to join the armed forces on equal basis with men. However, some people feel that only men should be members of the army, navy or Air Force. To what extend do you agree or disagree.
Sample Essay:
In some countries, women now are able to join the armed forces on equal basis with men. However, some people feel that only men should be members of the army, navy or Air Force. To what extend do you agree or disagree.
These days, some countries have the policy of treating males and females similarly for joining the armed forces. There is an opinion that these positions should be reserved for men only. I do not agree with this opinion due to several reasons that will be discussed in this essay.
Admittedly, there are some merits to restrict positions in the armed forces to males only. For one thing, men tend to be physically stronger, which enables them to conduct challenging tasks efficiently. Also, compared with women, men tend to make more reliable decisions since they are considered to be more critical and objective. However, nowadays women are also stronger than before due to good medical services and consumption of nutritious products. What is more, even though some women are not physically stronger than men, their empathy and caring equip them with the ability to communicate with others effectively and build close relationships. These traits can help them take other positions in the army, such as therapists or nurses.
I believe that women should be given an equal opportunity in the armed forces. Firstly, depriving women’s rights to join the armed forces will impair the army’s or even the country’s reputation. This is because not being treated equally with men makes women feel offended and discriminated, thereby causing them to question authorities’ equity. Secondly, having soldiers of both genders helps the army perform better due to their strengths in dealing with social emotional issues and building personal relationships. For example, in most army forces, it is mainly women who account for the majority of nurses and human resources staff. If men could perform those tasks better than women, why do we rarely see male nurses?
Though women are not as critical or strong as men, they have other traits that cannot be replaced by men, making them an irreplacable part of the army.
分析：
1.Type and structure
1.1 Structure type: Agree or disagree, both views, reasons and solutions?
Agree or disagree
Body1: 立论 你的观点2 abc + recipe
Body2: 让步反驳：为什么反面观点是对的, 但是有问题
Concession and refutation
1.2 A or A-C?
A: women joining the army
2.Keywords:
women join the army
keywords list
women should be given an equal opportunity in the armed forces
women are allowed to join the army
restrict positions in armed forces to males only
3. 10 mins planning
My views: I disagree
我调整了2个Body 段落的位置，Why？
Body 1: 让步反驳 The opposite opinion is good but has problems
Concession: 让步
abc tends to be flexible. You do not have to write 2 groups abc. Also, you do not have to write a,b,c. It is ok if you only write a and c.
Concession 1
1. men are physically stronger
2. enables them to conduct challenging tasks efficiently
Concession 2
a. makes more reliable decisions since they are considered to be more critical and objective
Refutation: 反驳
It is better for you to refute all abc above. If you write 2 groups abc for concession, you have to write 2 groups of refutation.
Refutation 1: 前提a不成立
women are also stronger than before due to good medical services and consumption of nutritious products.
Refutation 2: 即使前提a成立, 结果b也不成立 Progression in logic
即使没有男人身体好,没有他们critical,也不会影响军队的表现
even though some women are not physically stronger than men
(not as objective as men)
a.their empathy and caring equip them with the ability to communicate with others effectively and build close relationships.
b.help them take other positions in the army, such as therapists or nurses.
Body 2: Your opinion. Women need to join the army
Reason1:
a: depriving women’s rights to join the armed forces
b: make women feel offended and discriminated
c: question the authorities’ equity
d: impair the army’s or even the country’s reputation
Recipe:
a verb d
This is because a verb b, c ing
Reason2:
a: having soldiers of both genders
(women’s strengths in dealing with social emotional issues and building personal relationships)
b: help them become nurses and human resources staff
c: help the army perform better
Recipe:
a verb c
It is a that b, which c
If men could perform those tasks better than women, why do we rarely see male nurses?
