【PTE写作】教你写出一篇电脑眼里的满分作文,IPENGLISH黄老师微信公众号文章

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各位学霸们好，欢迎来到雅培英语PTE讲堂。今天黄老师跟大家来分享一下如何在大作文中写出一篇‘电脑认为不跑题’的文章。

首先，同学们在写大作文前需要明确一个点：电脑没有常识和逻辑，也不会联想。电脑所能做的仅仅只是判断同学们的文章在字面意思上有没有跑题。

这里同学们请重点理解‘字面意思’这四个词，它对于大家文章的分数来说非常重要！！

在讲具体的方法之前，黄老师先举个例子：

假设题目需要同学们写‘environment’环境类的话题，A同学文章中出现了‘factories’工厂。

那么，根据常识来看，工厂和环境显然是有关系的。但是！这两个词在字面意思上并没有直接的关联，所以就有一定几率被电脑识别成低分论述。

那么，这时B同学文章中出现了‘pollution from factories’,那么这时污染就是一个和环境有字面关联的词了，所以这就是一个高分论述。

同时，黄老师先给同学们提个醒：❌单纯的抄题目不能算关联性，并不是模板内把题目抄一遍，然后就可以为所欲为了（很多同学就是这样做的！）

所以，同学们在写大作文时，需要确保自己写的信息（模板外的）尽量多出现与题干核心信息字面关联强的词句。

p.s. ❌数字名称专家观点电脑无法识别，所以，千万不要写类似 according to a research by xxx university 类的信息了哦！）

那么，黄老师接下来给大家分享两篇本周考过的PTE大作文真题范文，同学们可以体会一下，黄老师是如何关联题干核心词的吧！（范文来自于《雅培PTE满分答案 - 3月版》，需要的同学们请找黄老师免费领取哦！）

范文1

ESSAY#001: Parents should be held legally responsible for what their children have done. What’s your opinion? Support it with examples.

论点1：As legal guardians, parents have the legal authority and the corresponding duty to take care of their children, which includes preventing them from committing crime.

展开 1：If their kids commit juvenile delinquency, it is undoubted that parents have failed to fulfill such duty and should be punishable by law.

论点2：Juvenile delinquency is often a direct result of domestic violence inflicted by parents, which calls for legal punishments for abusers.

展开2：Growing up in a family in which abuses take place on a daily basis, children will be likely to be mentally distorted and eventually commit violent crimes. In such cases, parents deserve severe punishment more than their kids.

秒懂逻辑：法定监护人 + 家庭暴力【一边倒】

范文2

ESSAY#005: Some people think human behaviors can be restricted by laws; others think laws have little effect. What is your opinion?

论点1：Laws inflict punishment of great severity to criminals, which can be acted as a deterrence for potential criminals as well as the mass public.

展开1：Punishments offered by various legislations varies from minor fines to imprisonment, or even death penalty in some states, binding those who are afraid of such chastisements to the law.

论点2：When profit gained by breaking the law outweighs the punishment, people would risk breaking the law.

展开2：In financial crime, despite clear legal boundaries, it is common for bribery and corruption to show repeatedly when financial benefits are sheer.

秒懂逻辑：惩罚 + 回报大于惩罚【正反各一边】