Some people believe the best way to produce a better society is to ensure there is only a small difference between the earnings of the richest and the poorest. To what extend do you agree or disagree.

As the disparity (很好的替代gap这个词儿哦) in the incomes of the richest and poorest in society grows, some individuals assert that the best way to improve our society is to ensure this gap is small. Although this idea makes sure people are equal, it is idealistic (烤鸭小伙伴们别一直impossible了哦) and ultimately unfeasible as exerting control over people’s income for the sole purpose of closing an income gap not only infringes on people’s rights, but also creates an incentive problem for people’s work.
It is unfair on those who are skilled and have worked hard for what they earn only to prevent them from earning too much. (非常清晰扼要的topic sentence，且句式复杂，烤鸭们可以学一学) The vast majority of those who earn a lot have often worked hard for it, spending years studying or refining innovative ideas that benefit society. To then rob them of such money for the sole reason that there are people who earn less, only allowing an arbitrary gap between the richest and poorest, would be an injustice.
Controlling people’s incomes to ensure a small gap also creates a conflict in incentives for people to work hard. （表达另外一个观点，如果控制贫富差距会导致人们工作不再努力）If we were to ensure there was only a small difference between the richest and poorest, the incentive to work hard, and therefore contribute to society through productive activity, diminishes as a primary reason to work hard is the offer of a monetary reward. And through control of people’s incomes, it becomes apparent that most people wouldn’t exert much effort as working harder yields minimal benefits.
The myopic view that we must ensure there is only a small gap between the incomes of the rich and poor, while good natured, is unrealistic as it carries many detrimental disadvantages. Although such a disparity is indeed a concern, the method we go about addressing this is crucial and perhaps there are better ways to produce a better society. (重复自己的观点，点明主题)

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