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雅思小作文自查清单

明天是7月最后一场雅思考试，A类烤鸭们，流程图地图准备好了吗？常规图表题也不要忘了哦~小作文写完一定要留2-3分钟自查。

今天小雅哥为烤鸭们科普一张特别实用的雅思小作文自查清单。

雅思小作文考查重点之一是数据描述的准确性，这直接涉及Task Response项目的分数。很多烤鸭头大的一点是小作文图表中数据量众多，难以区别关键信息和非关键信息。这里小雅哥推荐一个很常用的方法帮助烤鸭锻炼区分关键信息的能力，即让你的朋友或者同学直接看作文，如果他们能够大概画出和原题一致的图表，那么作文中涉及的关键信息是OK的。不过，在考场上，烤鸭们可以参考以下的checklist粗略地检查自己小作文的完成情况~

❗Type of diagram 图表类型

Have you correctly identified whether it is a bar chart/line graph/pie chart/flow chart/table?

有没有说清楚这个一个什么样的图表----柱状图？线图？饼图？还是流程图？这是Introduction段中改写题目的部分一定要涉及的内容。

❗The correct tense 时态

Have you correctly identified whether the data in the chart relates to past time, a current state of affairs or a future prediction? This includes not just using the correct tenses but also including specific times in your report.

有没有运用正确的时态呢？要记住，不仅要用对时态，还要在小作文中写清具体的时间！一般来说，如果图表中有具体年份，过去时、现在时和将来时的使用一定要准确谨慎~ 如果图表中没有具体年份，一般应全文采用现在时描写。

❗The subject 对象

Have you included all the subjects that are referred to in the diagram? Even if you have a bar chart or table naming 8 different countries for example, you still need to refer to them all in your report.

所有图表中所提到的对象都写进小作文了吗？如果图表里提到8个国家，全部都要写进去。烤鸭们拿到题目先不着急动笔，应该仔细分析图表信息，简单归纳后再写作。

❗Units 单位

Have you included references to the units? These may be units of time (months/years etc.), money (millions of & pound) or simple numbers (10,000s). To do this, you need to read the x and y axes carefully.

单位写清楚了吗？X轴和Y轴上的单位都要看清楚。小作文中的单位一般不必改写，如果涉及次数较少，可以直接抄进文章中以保证准确性。

❗Highs and lows / Beginnings and ends / Biggest and smallest

Have you included the extremes shown in the diagram? In nearly all charts and graphs these are key features to include as they give the reader a frame for understanding the chart or graph. When there is a lot of data, you may not include every extreme so you need to use your judgement.

文中包括重要信息点了吗？最高点、最低点、起点、终点、最多的、最少的一定要写进去！所以，烤鸭们最开始分析图表的时候也可以遵循先看趋势，后抓最值极值的顺序，确保正文写作中不遗漏重要的信息点。

❗Patterns and trends 模式和趋势

Have you noted any patterns?

In dynamic charts (when there is a change in time), it is nearly always important to note whether the general trend is upwards or downwards.

在一个有时间变化的图表里，整体趋势如何？上升还是下降？有不有平稳和波动？这些都是图表描述的重点！

❗Exceptions 例外情况

Is there anything in the chart that is completely different to the general pattern? If so, this too is very likely to be a key detail that needs to be noted.

某些图表中可能存在极端值，就是特别大或者特别小的数值。可以将这些数值统归为“例外”，因为常规的趋势写作中很难包括进来。不过烤鸭们不必紧张，“例外”情况通常可以用一句话或者一个分词结构接在趋势描述的主句后的方法解决，既简洁又准确。

❗Ordering information排序

Have you ordered the information in a logical way? It is no good putting all the right information in if the keys points are hidden away. This can happen if you follow the order of the chart without thinking. Possible logical ways of ordering the report include:

烤鸭们从图表中选择的信息，是不是按照合理的逻辑顺序排列了？这一点涉及Cohesion and Coherence单项的评分。

常见的逻辑顺序有：

✳ Start with the most significant detail 从最重要的细节开始说起

✳Start with the general pattern, then note exceptions 从一般模式说起，然后注明有例外

✳Group items that are similar 写一组里面有相似性的东西

✳Move from the largest to the smallest 从最大值写到最小值

✳Move from the first in time to the last in time 从时间起点写到时间终点

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