【换题季】高频大作文详解之-护士和老师是否应该获得更高报酬

原创 2020年11月13日 7PLUS英语




今天,我们一起来看一篇乍看很简单,但开始构思和写作的时候有一定难度的一篇高频大作文-护士和老师是否应该获得更高报酬


Manyworkers like nurses and teachers should get more pay, especially whenpeople work in finance are getting more pay nowadays. What is youropinion?


首先在开始构思我们的大作文的时候,要选择好总论点。这一篇的总论点还是很好辨析的。虽然是问‘whatis your opinion’, 但根据题目前面的提示,我们能写的观点无非是两个,一个是‘nursesand teachers should get more pay’, 一个是‘they should not get morepay’。在这道题目里,我们建议写一边倒的观点,对下文分论点展开比较容易。


大部分同学们在这篇都会选择支持护士老师获得更高的报酬,但是在具体落实到分论点的时候,会觉得不那么好写。首先可能是因为这两个职业我们虽然熟悉,但在写到具体的工作内容的时候没那么多的点可以转换成英文。另外一个就是要和高报酬联系在一起的时候有困难。


其实这一篇如果选择‘should这一方,可以从两个思路去展开。一个是高薪对行业乃至推及到社会能带来的好处,一个是这两个职业的特性以及重要性决定了他们值得更高的工资。




首先,我们从高薪对于行业的好处角度出发,给大家提供一个分论点参考。


drawmore talented people to the industry(吸引人才)

Higher pay- moresought-after occupation (受欢迎的职业)-a bigger talent pool (更大的人才库)-provision of  exceptional educationand medical services(提供优异的教育和医疗服务)with highly skilled professionals-benefitthe whole society



其次,我们从这两个职业对社会的重要性,以及自身的工作特性来延伸出两个分论点,证明他们值得提高工资。


1essential to the functioning of our society(对社会运作必不可少)

Nurse-has a broadand far-fetching role in delivering health care(提供卫生健康服务)and promoting public health (推动公共健康) 

Teacher-facilitateknowledge construction

-havea significant andlifelong impacton students

-shape the futureof our society



2heavy workload(繁重的工作量)

Nurse- nightshifts(晚班),extended working hours (延长工作时间)tosustain a healthcaresystem which is already short-staffed(人员紧缺)

Teacher-Workover their contracted hours(工作超过合同时间)without pay

gradehomework, plan lessons, report to parents and principals



另外,这篇essay除了可以像上面讨论的那样把护士和老师放在一起写,即从他们的共同性来写,也可以从他们各自的特点,一段解释为什么护士应该提高收入一段解释为什么老师应该提高收入。如果同学们觉得合在一些写不太容易清楚阐释分论点,那么分开来写也是另一种思路。


同样的,在这里提供给同学们两个思路。在提到护士应该提高工资的时候,不防可以和最近的实事(COVID-19)结合起来,看一下相关的新闻报道。一是可以提供我们一个思路,另外可以积累一些最地道的相关内容的表达方法。


1high-riskgroup 护士

Havea close contractwith infectiousagents(亲密接触感染原)viruses,parasite, bacteriaetc.

Inadequatepersonal  protectiveequipment (个人防护装备)

Insufficientprofessional training

-Higherrisk ofcontracting infectiousdisease thangeneral public


2increasing work stress 老师

Growingadministrative tasks

Beardisrespect andeven abuse fromparents

Keepup with newcurriculum reform(课程改革)

-teachers are morelikely to burn out and suffer from mental health problem



下面是一个body段,先用一句话提出论点,然后进行解释,接下来提出例子来佐证自己的观点,最后简短地总结。


论点First and foremost, nurses certainly should get ahigher pay considering the high risks of acquiring infections intheir workplace. 

解释To be more specific, while nurses are at the forefrontof saving lives and combating  pandemics, the nature of their workmeans they are in close contact with viruses and bacteria. Fuelled byinadequate protective equipment and insufficient training, nurses aremuch more likely to contract infectious diseases than generalpopulation.

举例Takecurrent COVID-19 pandemic as an example ,nurses and other healthcare workers make up more than 15 percent ofcoronavirus cases in the state of Victoria, according to a reportreleased by local government.

总结Therefore, it is undoubted that nurses deserve a payrise given the grave risks entailed intheir job. 


在写body段的时候,我们要避免一个误区那就是不能用B不好来佐证A。在这道题里,题目中虽然提到了‘peopleworking infinance’,但是不能用他们不应该获得高报酬来解释护士老师应该获得高报酬。提到金融从业人员是可以的,但是作文还是要围绕着护士老师展开。


这篇作文如果要写反方,即‘teacher and nurses should not get morepay’ 不是十分好写,但在这里仍然提供两个思路,仅供参考。

1Increasing pay-hospitals and schools need more government funding-puta financialstrain on localgovernment


2Higher salary- hospitals and schools with limited budget have to hirefewer employees- have a dire impact on current staff andsystem.



这篇大作文的思路就和同学们分析到这里。看完以后对于这篇护士老师加薪的高频题有没有更有信心了呢?现在不防就开始动笔写一下吧!



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